Descriptive essay: sensory detail and peer review
Write a descriptive essay of three or more paragraphs with an introduction, at least one body paragraph and a conclusion, using sensory detail to bring a chosen place alive, built around a thesis that states your point about the place, then peer review two classmates' drafts.
Editorial process
Last reviewed · August 13, 2026
The thesis comes from your opinion of the place
The instruction contains the whole method if you read the brainstorming sentence carefully: review your notes, ask what point you want to make about the place, and craft the thesis statement from that main point. That order is the assignment. Most descriptive essays that lose marks are written in the opposite order — details first, then a thesis bolted on at the end — and the result reads as an inventory of a garage rather than an essay about one. Decide first what you think about the place. Your attic is not merely full of objects; it is a place where a family stores things it cannot throw away. Your first car is not merely a car; it was unreliable and you loved it anyway. Once you have that point, it does the selecting for you, and the details that do not serve it can be cut without regret.
Sensory detail is the second requirement and the brief lists five senses deliberately, because sight alone is where almost everyone stops. Smell and sound carry a scene more efficiently than visual description does, and taste and touch are the two that make a restaurant or a garage feel inhabited rather than observed. Aim for specificity over quantity: one exact detail beats three vague ones, and a concrete noun usually beats an adjective. Structurally the brief is generous — three or more paragraphs, with an introduction, at least one body paragraph and a conclusion — so spend the freedom on ordering the details rather than on adding more. Then treat the peer review as its own graded task: for each of two drafts, name one strong point and explain why it worked for you as a reader, and make one constructive suggestion, quoting specific examples from your classmate's paper as the instruction requires.
Likely learning objectives
Inferred from the brief — check these against your own rubric.
- 01Derive a thesis from a considered opinion about a subject rather than from the subject itself.
- 02Select descriptive detail according to a dominant impression.
- 03Use more than one sensory channel to build a scene.
- 04Structure a short essay with introduction, body and conclusion.
- 05Give peer feedback that identifies specific strengths and one actionable improvement.
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Course-wide instructions that accompany this question
You must proofread your paper. But do not strictly rely on your computer’s spell-checker and grammar-checker; failure to do so indicates a lack of effort on your part and you can expect your grade to suffer accordingly. Papers with numerous misspelled words and grammatical mistakes will be penalized. Read over your paper – in silence and then aloud – before handing it in and make corrections as necessary. Often it is advantageous to have a friend proofread your paper for obvious errors. Handwritten corrections are preferable to uncorrected mistakes. Use a standard 10 to 12 point (10 to 12 characters per inch) typeface. Smaller or compressed type and papers with small margins or single-spacing are hard to read. It is better to let your essay run over the recommended number of pages than to try to compress it into fewer pages. Likewise, large type, large margins, large indentations, triple-spacing, increased leading (space between lines), increased kerning (space between letters), and any other such attempts at “padding” to increase the length of a paper are unacceptable, wasteful of trees, and will not fool your professor. The paper must be neatly formatted, double-spaced with a one-inch margin on the top, bottom, and sides of each page. When submitting hard copy, be sure to use white paper and print out using dark ink. If it is hard to read your essay, it will also be hard to follow your argument. Descriptive Writing Assignment ADDITIONAL INSTRUCTIONS FOR THE CLASS Discussion Questions (DQ) Initial responses to the DQ should address all components of the questions asked, include a minimum of one scholarly source, and be at least 250 words. Successful responses are substantive (i.e., add something new to the discussion, engage others in the discussion, well-developed idea) and include at least one scholarly source. One or two sentence responses, simple statements of agreement or “good post,” and responses that are off-topic will not count as substantive. Substantive responses should be at least 150 words. I encourage you to incorporate the readings from the week (as applicable) into your responses. Weekly Participation Your initial responses to the mandatory DQ do not count toward participation and are graded separately. In addition to the DQ responses, you must post at least one reply to peers (or me) on three separate days, for a total of three replies. Participation posts do not require a scholarly source/citation (unless you cite someone else’s work). Part of your weekly participation includes viewing the weekly announcement and attesting to watching it in the comments. These announcements are made to ensure you understand everything that is due during the week. APA Format and Writing Quality Familiarize yourself with APA format and practice using it correctly. It is used for most writing assignments for your degree. Visit the Writing Center in the Student Success Center, under the Resources tab in LoudCloud for APA paper templates, citation examples, tips, etc. Points will be deducted for poor use of APA format or absence of APA format (if required). Cite all sources of information! When in doubt, cite the source. Paraphrasing also requires a citation. I highly recommend using the APA Publication Manual, 6th edition. Use of Direct Quotes I discourage overutilization of direct quotes in DQs and assignments at the Masters’ level and deduct points accordingly. As Masters’ level students, it is important that you be able to critically analyze and interpret information from journal articles and other resources. Simply restating someone else’s words does not demonstrate an understanding of the content or critical analysis of the content. It is best to paraphrase content and cite your source. LopesWrite Policy For assignments that need to be submitted to LopesWrite, please be sure you have received your report and Similarity Index (SI) percentage BEFORE you do a “final submit” to me. Once you have received your report, please review it. This report will show you grammatical, punctuation, and spelling errors that can easily be fixed. Take the extra few minutes to review instead of getting counted off for these mistakes. Review your similarities. Did you forget to cite something? Did you not paraphrase well enough? Is your paper made up of someone else’s thoughts more than your own? Visit the Writing Center in the Student Success Center, under the Resources tab in LoudCloud for tips on improving your paper and SI score. Late Policy The university’s policy on late assignments is 10% penalty PER DAY LATE. This also applies to late DQ replies. Please communicate with me if you anticipate having to submit an assignment late. I am happy to be flexible, with advance notice. We may be able to work out an extension based on extenuating circumstances. If you do not communicate with me before submitting an assignment late, the GCU late policy will be in effect. I do not accept assignments that are two or more weeks late unless we have worked out an extension. As per policy, no assignments are accepted after the last day of class. Any assignment submitted after midnight on the last day of class will not be accepted for grading. Communication Communication is so very important. There are multiple ways to communicate with me: Questions to Instructor Forum: This is a great place to ask course content or assignment questions. If you have a question, there is a good chance one of your peers does as well. This is a public forum for the class. Individual Forum: This is a private forum to ask me questions or send me messages. This will be checked at least once every 24 hours.
Turn the brief into deliverables
- 01A descriptive essay of three or more paragraphs on the restaurant or one listed topic.
- 02An introduction, at least one body paragraph and a conclusion.
- 03A thesis statement expressing your point about the place.
- 04Sensory detail drawn from more than sight alone.
- 05Comments on at least two classmates' drafts, each naming a strength and one suggestion.
Brainstorm, find the point, then choose details
Choosing the place and finding the point
Brainstorm, then decide what you actually think about the place.
The thesis statement
One sentence carrying the dominant impression the essay will build.
Introduction
Orient the reader in the place and arrive at the thesis.
Body: the scene built in sensory detail
Ordered detail across several senses, each one serving the dominant impression.
Conclusion
Return to the point with the reader now able to see what you saw.
Peer review responses
Two responses, each with a named strength and one improvement, quoting the draft.
Sensory detail and dominant impression
Recommended databases
- Purdue OWL
- Ticket to Write chapter 6
- Course lecture for the week
- Writing centre handouts on descriptive writing
Search sequence
- 1.Read the assigned chapter on descriptive writing before drafting.
- 2.Read a reference explanation of the dominant impression in descriptive prose.
- 3.Review guidance on writing a thesis that asserts rather than announces.
- 4.Collect example sensory details for the place across all five senses.
- 5.Read guidance on giving specific, constructive peer feedback.
Reference shortlist
These are authoritative starting points, not a ready-made bibliography. A qualified reviewer must confirm that each source fits the assignment and supports the claim beside which it is cited.
Nothing here is cleared for citation until you have read it.
- 01
Descriptive Essays
Purdue OWL, Purdue University · 2024
The definitional guidance on sensory detail and on showing rather than telling, which is what the brief asks for.
- 02
Strong Thesis Statements
Purdue OWL, Purdue University · 2024
How a thesis asserts a position, needed because the brief derives the thesis from your point about the place.
- 03
Essay Writing
Purdue OWL, Purdue University · 2024
Structural guidance on introduction, body and conclusion for a short essay.
- 04
Proofreading
Purdue OWL, Purdue University · 2024
Revision guidance that also models the kind of specific feedback the peer review requires.
Review before submission
Common mistakes
- Writing a thesis that announces the topic instead of taking a position on it.
- Cataloguing details in the order you noticed them rather than in the order that builds the impression.
- Relying entirely on visual description and never using smell, sound, taste or touch.
- Choosing a topic broader than the assignment intends, so no scene ever comes into focus.
- Posting the draft as an attachment when the instruction requires pasted text.
- Giving peer feedback that praises without quoting anything specific from the draft.
Submission checklist
- The essay is at least three paragraphs with all three structural parts present.
- The thesis states a point about the place, not just its name.
- At least two senses are used in the description.
- Every major detail supports the dominant impression.
- The draft is pasted into the discussion area rather than attached.
- Two peer responses each name a strength and one constructive suggestion with examples.
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Aaron Bishop
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